Weakness

There is a weakness here. Lots of stars on the text. We are trying to find the holes. You probably thought this was a bit of a joke. Has John gone? Yes John's gone. And then I say When did John arrive? Where are we? Page 7. No whereabouts in the world. Where are we? Has John gone? When did John arrive? Who is John? It's confusing but I think it's OK. Also - John was in the audience earlier but now he's gone. He didn't like what he saw. So we have someone walking out of the room. The door slams but noone has moved. This is a weak weak weak weak bit. It seems like the weak bits are when we go on a journey. We don't really know what the journey is. But we do know. So we need to change it on the page. Tim says 'Maybe we need to make the journey more clear or not as clear.' It could be simple. It could start very cold and we arrive very hot. We could arrive in Ibiza. It's actually not as loaded as it is here. In fact we're describing the journey to the Club Tropicana video.